...to the lowest point of $20 million.. ..cover. Furthermore, due... (new sentence needed) According to table 4, it represents (illustrates / shows)... use approximation - 70% = seven out of ten ; 26% = just over a quarter supply / supplied "chaos and dispute" - seems very serious - maybe long waiting times is a better reason? Also, use 'disgruntled' , (dis) satisfaction levels, (un) satisfactory - use a greater range of vocabulary.
1. Hong Kong As is shown in Figure 1, the profits of Mojo in HK rose steadily to $60 million from 1994 to 1997 before there was a dramatic drop to the lowest point $20 million in 1999. Profits then grew gradually towards 2001. The increase was probably due to the economic prosperity before 1997 while the slump was possibly caused by financial crisis after the handover. After the crisis, the HK economy started to recover, furthermore, due to the growth of China market, the profits of Mojo climbed gradually to $40 million in 2001.
Singapore In contrast, profits of Mojo in Singapore climbed slightly from $40 million in 1994 to $50 million in 1996. However, they declined steadily to $10 million in 2001. The slight increase might be the result of Singapore’s low taxation policy in early 1990s. The attractive price led to a boom in sales which brought profits to Mojo. After that, because of the keen competition from Malaysia, the profits fell gradually towards 2001. 2.
According to table 4, it represents seven aspects of working conditions at its head office in Central. There are three aspects of working conditions including equipment, office furniture and pantry which have a big contrast in percentage of satisfaction between senior and junior staff.
1. Equipment The findings show that over 70% of senior level staff are satisfied with the equipment whereas only 26% of junior level staff are satisfied with it. The reason for this is lack of sufficient equipment supply to the junior level staff, such as computers and printers. This could lead to inefficiency of their work since they need to wait for printing their documents which is quite time consuming.
2. Office furniture Slightly over a half of junior staff are dissatisfied with the office furniture, but only one-fourth of senior staff are dissatisfied with it. This might be because the furniture for junior staff, such as chairs and tables, are old-fashioned and uncomfortable. A result of this is that their motivation to work might be low under the uncomfortable working environment.
3. Pantry Nearly 50% of both senior and junior staff are discontented with the pantry. It appears that the pantry room is too small, and only one microwave is provided for the staff. The effect of this might be chaos and dispute caused in the pantry during the lunch hour.
...to the lowest point of $20 million..
..cover. Furthermore, due... (new sentence needed)
According to table 4, it represents (illustrates / shows)...
use approximation - 70% = seven out of ten ; 26% = just over a quarter
supply / supplied
"chaos and dispute" - seems very serious - maybe long waiting times is a better reason?
Also, use 'disgruntled' , (dis) satisfaction levels, (un) satisfactory - use a greater range of vocabulary.
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Hong Kong
As is shown in Figure 1, the profits of Mojo in HK rose steadily to $60 million from 1994 to 1997 before there was a dramatic drop to the lowest point $20 million in 1999. Profits then grew gradually towards 2001. The increase was probably due to the economic prosperity before 1997 while the slump was possibly caused by financial crisis after the handover. After the crisis, the HK economy started to recover, furthermore, due to the growth of China market, the profits of Mojo climbed gradually to $40 million in 2001.
Singapore
In contrast, profits of Mojo in Singapore climbed slightly from $40 million in 1994 to $50 million in 1996. However, they declined steadily to $10 million in 2001. The slight increase might be the result of Singapore’s low taxation policy in early 1990s. The attractive price led to a boom in sales which brought profits to Mojo. After that, because of the keen competition from Malaysia, the profits fell gradually towards 2001.
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According to table 4, it represents seven aspects of working conditions at its head office in Central. There are three aspects of working conditions including equipment, office furniture and pantry which have a big contrast in percentage of satisfaction between senior and junior staff.
1. Equipment
The findings show that over 70% of senior level staff are satisfied with the equipment whereas only 26% of junior level staff are satisfied with it. The reason for this is lack of sufficient equipment supply to the junior level staff, such as computers and printers. This could lead to inefficiency of their work since they need to wait for printing their documents which is quite time consuming.
2. Office furniture
Slightly over a half of junior staff are dissatisfied with the office furniture, but only one-fourth of senior staff are dissatisfied with it. This might be because the furniture for junior staff, such as chairs and tables, are old-fashioned and uncomfortable. A result of this is that their motivation to work might be low under the uncomfortable working environment.
3. Pantry
Nearly 50% of both senior and junior staff are discontented with the pantry. It appears that the pantry room is too small, and only one microwave is provided for the staff. The effect of this might be chaos and dispute caused in the pantry during the lunch hour.